ustrated by trouble. he often tells us that everything will be all right if we have enough confidence in life. due to his optimism, we are all confident to face our life and work.

we all think that father is not in the least an ordinary man. he plays an extraordinary role in my family. we can't have anything without him. now i'm pursuing further studies at college far away from father. i miss him very much. and i often see him in my dreams. his great image is deeply carved in my mind.

评语：

本文作者以朴实的语言充满感情地刻画了父亲的不平凡的形象，分别从四个不同的角度描述了父亲的勤劳、奉献、关爱和乐观。内容真实感人，行文简洁流畅，结构清晰，组织有条有理，首尾呼应，给读者以强烈的感染力。 

作者用词简洁精确，并能很好地尝试一些新学的词汇及表达，使简洁的行。文更为生动。作者没有运用太多复杂的句式，但能适当运用介词短语、分词结构、强调及重复的手法，恰到好处  地突出了行文句式的变化，使文章更耐读。
 

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