very red, not shining. it rose slowly. at last it broke through the red clouds and jumped above the sea, just like a deep-red ball. at the same time the clouds and the sea water became red and bright.

　　what a moving and unforgettable scene!

　　5. 叙述与对话

　　　　引用故事情节中主要人物的对话是记叙文提高表现力的一种好方法。适当地用直接引语代替间接的主观叙述，可以客观生动地反映人物的性格、品质和心理状态，使记叙生动、有趣，使文章内容更加充实、具体。试比较下面两段的叙述效果：

　　i was in the kitchen, and i was cooking something. suddenly i heard a loud noise from the front. i thought maybe someone was knocking the door. i asked who it was but i heard no reply. after a while i saw my cat running across the parlor. i realized it was the cat. i felt released.

　　　　这本来应是一段故事性很强的文字，但经作者这么一写，就不那么吸引人了。原因是文中用的都是叙述模式，没有人物语言，把“悬念”给冲淡了。可作如下调整：

　　i was in the kitchen cooking something. "crash!" a loud noise came from the front. thinking someone was knocking at the door, i asked, "who?" no reply. after a while, i saw my cat running across the parlor. &qu

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