如何在写作中进行“简洁”的表达
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本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-mygrandfather'sfamily”,
而使用了被动语态后,仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,
相对来说更简洁一些:inthefall,mygrandfather'sfamilynotonlymilkedthecowbutalsomowedandstackedthehay.
5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语,例如下面这句话:
mygrandfatherdidn'thavetimetostandarounddoingnothingwithhisschoolfriends.
standarounddoingnothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter:mygrandfatherdidn'thavetimetoloiterwithhisschoolfriends.
6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达,例如:
profitsfromthefarmwerenotlarge.sometimestheyweretoosmalltomeet theexpen
sesofrunnin gafarm.theywerenotsufficienttopayforauniversitydegree.
两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子:profitsfromthefarmweresometimestoosmalltomeetoperationalexpenses,letalonepayforauniversitydegree.
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