me and went.

　　when i finally came to that family, i saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger. there was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger.

　　i gave the rice to the mother. she divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice. when she came back, i asked her, "where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "to my neighbors — they are hungry also!"

　　3. 用活语言，准确生动

　　记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。

　　原文：

　　one day xiaoqiang was wandering away. he was soon lost among people and traffic. he could not find the way back home and started crying. just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying. they went up to xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened. xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where

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