，审题的准确是非常重要的。

　　学生作文：shanghai is developing quickly everyday. quite a few foreigners come to visit shanghai. as the hosts of shanghai, we must be lovely shanghaineses to tell the visitors that shanghai is an international city. to be a lovely shanghainese, first, we should do our best to make the city more beautiful to show our enthusiasm. next, we should be kind and friendly to everyone. we must do so to make our guests fell our zeal. finally, we should study and work hard to rise our ability. shanghai is developing and we should make progress to follow the epoch.

　　教师评析：该篇作文行文流畅，结构清晰，以“first，next，finally”的结构描述，层次感很强。不定式的恰当运用体现了考生较好的语法功底。
 
　　教师拟评分：9分

　　［例2］six years' school life

　　审题：该题要求考生对学校生活进行回顾和总结，适合以夹叙夹议的方式来写作。（此外，从情感教育的角度来看，阅卷老师总希望读到考生回忆自己美好、快乐的学校生活，而不是讨厌自己的母校、老师、同学等消极情绪的体现。）

　　学生作文：i've been in my  school for six years. six years' school life plays an important role in my life. i enjoy making friends, getting

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