的战争。文风成熟老练，这在小学生的作文中是难能可贵的。

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　　［例6］审题：该图要求考生先看懂漫画，对它进行清晰的描述，同时根据其隐藏的寓意提出自己的观点，如在此图中应关注树木被砍伐而提出环保的重要性。

　　学生作文：

　　seeing this picture, we know that these trees have been cut down. but as a very little baby in the picture, he must be puzzled. he will ask: what are these? are these trees? of course, in our imagination, trees must be tall, strong and green enough. actually, his question shows humans a problem that is worth thinking about. the covering rate of the forest in the world has kept decreasing these years and it caused a lot of problems on environment. as we all know, trees are very important in our life. they can make the air fresher, reduce natural disasters and soon. so i appeal: don't cut down trees. let' s make our earth greener for our later generation. don't let the children think trees are only roots!
 
　　教师评析：整篇作文结构清晰，全文分三段，第一段详细地描述漫画的内容；第二段阐述其蕴涵的寓意即环保对于世界和后代们的重要性；第三段提出作者的号召，使文章的结尾明快、有力！
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